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Transformation (Critique requested)I looked into the shadows of the dark room that was riddled with cobwebs. My mom told me to stay out of the room but that only made my mind more curious as to what she wanted to keep from me. I turned on my flashlight and shined it upon the room's very damp and old construction. The smell that was absorbed in the walls would make anyone's nose hairs die upon contact and the boards creaked and sounded like they would collapse in on themselves at any moment. As I continued deeper into the room, I heard a whisper that sent a shiver down my spine. "Get out..."
I turned quickly around only to see nothing but a shelf of old novelties. I backed up slowly as the voice continued to echo, "Get out...get out..."
I froze with fear as I felt my hairs on my neck stand up on end and the voice got closer to me. As it got closer, the floor boards creaked louder and louder. "Get out....get out..."
But just as fast as the voice came, it disappeared into a bone chilling silence with nothing but the sounds
Beautiful EleanorPretty as a rose, incredulous allure
The girl before me, the girl named Eleanore
She walks with grace and flow
Her stride smooth and her hair a shimmering glow
The motion captivating your eyes
You feel like floating to the skies
Her eyes twinkling in the shining light
The hazel tint like a falling leaf on an autumn’s night
She spoke with a tone softer than a quilt well sewn
Her voice like a musician's piece, in perfect tone
Its sound more addicting than anything
Her voice so warm, it makes you wanna sing
Her presence is calming, leaves you in peace
All your tension, finally released
The feeling hard to describe
How fast you worries subside
My heart is pounding a precise, rhythmic beat
Like the sound of a stormy cloud raining sleet
She makes me happy, my worries succeeding no more
For I have the pleasure of seeing beautiful Eleanore
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Lilyas has dedicated herself to making our community a brighter place with her vibrant artwork and infectious enthusiasm for interacting with others in our community. It has certainly paid off, as many deviants flock to her page on a daily basis to let her know how much of an inspiration she is. We absolutely agree, and couldn't let all that hard work go without recognition, so it's with great pride that we bestow the Deviousness Award for March 2014, to ... Read More